L.I- To hook the reader in by show not tell.
To create a narrative based on a picture.
The dust and dirt are making my eyes scratch. I want to cry but I can’t. Noise surrounds me and I don’t know where to look. Destruction is all around me. People and places are in ruins, it’s like a natural disaster but there is nothing natural about this bloodshed. How can people do this to each other? How can they do this to their country? So many questions envelope my mind but no answers come to comfort me.
“BOOM” another huge blast explodes. I have to get out of here. I have to protect these innocent people by putting my life on the line. I see a child crying down a side street. I dart towards her imagining this was my own child. I will do anything to save her and protect her from these animals. “Braap, Braap” thousands of gunshots shroud the sky above as I final make it to my target, the girl. She is in meltdown, this whole city is in meltdown. I must save her. This is my destiny.
- Use awesome descriptive words (adjectives)- Jordan and Lachlan
- Impact- short sentences. (Lachlan)
- Language features- similes, onomatopoeia, metaphor etc.
- Hook the reader in (make it exciting, show not tell) Dante